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On Tuesday, we heard from 4 presenters, David, Christie, Alyssa, and Rebecca. I took notes on each presentation and really reflected on how to make each one better and what they can add to make it flow more. In Alyssa's we thought that adding an explicit conversation where she quit softball from her coach would add demention and conflict. In David's we focused more on revising his layout to make it easier to follow his story of himself vs. madness. Christie's was very family oriented, but we suggested other ways which she could really exemplify the theme behind her family vacation every year. Finally, Rebecca's futuristic twitterive of the events in her life that were taking place next year, would have been better if she organized her past, present, and future.

I think by critiquing these twitterives really gave me tactics to help make mine better as well.

      In my small group was Katie Collins, Alissa Francisco, and Davide Reyes. We all addressed questions about each others Twitterives and the questions that we had as well. I was luckey that my group was very in tuned and gave me good suggestions to improve my Twiterive.

First, I had to identify my theme and place more specifically. My group helped me realize my place was a mental one, the idolization in my head of someone greater I wanted to become. My theme is having a relative I have never met as a role model, and my repetend was the roots. 

Also, they suggested some other genres I could work with, possible a moving slide show, and a "virtual mirror" which made me see my grandpa as I looked closer at myself. 

All and all, I thought that having the small group setting before we presented was very beneficial because it let us feel more comfortable sharing such personal stories first before we shared them with the class.